Our first feedback was from our teacher, Mr Dunford, who said our sequence was too short. This can be changed by simply adding another scene. This is a valid point due to the fact it is only 47 seconds and our final piece must be between 2 – 3 minutes. Other responces from peers have said they like how it ends and slowly transforms the knife into the title of the film, and the use of the quick shots showing the blood on the hands and the different angles of the face. However, they thought that the scene that we placed there as a dream was not clear to others and so an effect over this may help make this clear.
So we plan to add an additional scene and make the dream scene more obvious to the viewer, this should improve our story board and our production.